Ohhhhh, this is juicy!!! I wanna read more. Really....like maybe someone finds out what you did...like Connie....and what happens with that information.
Seriously, gotta check your tenses but other than that, I really like it. Beef up the abuse and contrast that to how others thought he was such a great guy...and then have the other woman come to the house..OR the grieving widow to go see the other woman. I LOVE IT!!!!
Wow...you're on Facebook, have your own blog - do you tweet too?!
ReplyDeleteOhhhhh, this is juicy!!! I wanna read more. Really....like maybe someone finds out what you did...like Connie....and what happens with that information.
ReplyDeleteSeriously, gotta check your tenses but other than that, I really like it. Beef up the abuse and contrast that to how others thought he was such a great guy...and then have the other woman come to the house..OR the grieving widow to go see the other woman. I LOVE IT!!!!